Well we have to do this thing to persuade something to buy something from a fake company. I decided to do a watch and came up with this. So what do you guys think?
Last edited by NeXuS4909 (2008-04-02 22:05:26)
Good job. What subject are you doing it for?
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Well, can I assume that other will be using felt tip pens and crayons? If so, you're on the way to an A!
You might want to fix that.Built out titanium
Yea i had to re-read it like 3 times to fix all the problems. That's what happens when you rushsome_random_panda wrote:
You might want to fix that.Built out titanium
well, i wouldn't buy that watch anyways because its ugly as shit.
that aside, the writing is a bit hard to read, and the crappy around the box style is too much work for the viewer.
that aside, the writing is a bit hard to read, and the crappy around the box style is too much work for the viewer.
yeah, it looks sleek but you need text that JUMPS out at the consumer
Maybe a tagline under the Adept in italics and then some shit faded into the background with a guess model or some shit faded into the bottom right
If the consumer has to turn their head sideways to figure out wtf is going on in the text, they wont even bother to look
edit: I dont like guess models, but its a good image, it would be one of those, "Buy this and you can be this guy" adds...
Maybe a tagline under the Adept in italics and then some shit faded into the background with a guess model or some shit faded into the bottom right
If the consumer has to turn their head sideways to figure out wtf is going on in the text, they wont even bother to look
edit: I dont like guess models, but its a good image, it would be one of those, "Buy this and you can be this guy" adds...
Last edited by GodFather (2008-04-02 22:49:21)
Sound advice. It looks nice visually but you're not going to want to read the next, I must admit I didn't even notice it when I first looked.GodFather wrote:
If the consumer has to turn their head sideways to figure out wtf is going on in the text, they wont even bother to look
Less wording? Or make it less difficult to read, I don't wanna have to wring my neck to read it all. And make the watch jump out more, a tip would be to make the size difference between the name and the watch bigger.